Sunday, September 20, 2020

Comment Wall for My Portfolio

My portfolio project is located here! Please enjoy!



Here's a lovely meme to kick things off.



5 comments:

  1. Hi, Rachel! I thoroughly enjoyed reading your stories. I can tell that you also enjoyed writing them yourself and you put effort into it. The focus for this week’s feedback is the author's notes. I also read “How Silver-Fox Created the World” and I thought the changes you made in your story were impressive and different. Upon reading your story, the tone was unlike the source story. I could also feel the pain and sadness Fox and Coyote felt through the story’s dialogue. Why/how did you come up with the plot of the world burning? It’s interesting how you took a light-hearted story and made it into something more substantial and emotional -- I like it! The second story, “Damon and Samantha,” was also a fun read! It definitely made me not like Damon; I was hoping he was going to change for Samantha, honestly. The author’s note for this story explains the changes you made from the source story well and why you did so. Overall, the stories are great and the author’s notes are informative and helpful. Awesome work!

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  2. Hi Rachel!
    First off, you're a magnificent writer! Your way of describing details to help bring them to life is so amazing! I would’ve thought this was a piece of writing from an actual book! I also really really enjoyed your other storybook posts! I think my favorite one, though it was kind of depressing was the fox and coyote story. It was so vivid and I could really see all the details fox was describing in my head. I also found myself grieving along with fox because of how detailed the story was. The story was so good, but I want more!!! I want to know what happened to the land that fox created, why did he have to destroy it? what caused his decision to do it? I'd love to learn the background of the story for sure, from your creative point of view! Anyway, great job Rachel! Keep writing!

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  3. Hey Rachel!
    I loved reading the stories in your portfolio—I think you're a great writer! I think the incorporation of sounds/soundtracks is super unique and really helps set the tone of your stories. I particularly enjoyed reading "Fox and Coyote." Your adaptation is wonderful; I think the changes that you described in your author's note were warranted and well-executed. Because of your use of descriptive words, I truly felt like I could imagine every detail of the plot, so much so that I felt like I was right alongside the characters while this was happening to them. Your use of dialogue, too, added greatly to the story and contributed to the story's overall (sad) tone. My only suggestion would be to include a little bit more about how Fox created the world, just to incorporate more of the original story's character. Great job, and good luck with the rest of your classes this semester!

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  4. Hi Rachel,
    I really enjoyed looking through your portfolio. I think you are a talented writer and it really shows in your stories. I loved the way you were able to describe both the characters and setting. It made your stories come alive and diverge me into the tales as a reader. A lot of other comments have said how well you authors notes were. I too believe you did a great job in this area. I struggled with the authors notes and wish I would have seen you page sooner! Overall you did an amazing job. Hope the end of your semester is going well!

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  5. Hi Rachel,

    I loved looking through your portfolio! The photos, the theme, and the youtube video with the crackling fire are all so unique and really bring your portfolio together. I loved how you included four of your favorite stories that you have written this semester. The story of the fox and the coyote was heartbreaking, and the style of your writing just made it so vivid and interesting to read. In the story of Darwyn and Shea, I at first thought it was about rapunzel but I was very interested to see that it was based off of a bible story! I love your writing and I thought these two stories were very engaging.

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Microfiction Revisions: Two Spooky Little Stories

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